From Warrior of the Nile, currently out on submission
(Khenet, a warrior of ancient Egypt, is assigned by Pharaoh to journey down the Nile as bodyguard to Tiya, a noblewoman who has been selected by the goddess Nepthys to help her put a stop to black magic threatening all Egypt. Tiya is to die in the attempt and Khenet will also perish.) During the voyage Khenet discovers that his growing feelings for Tiya are affecting him, changing how he views the world, want he wants.
Khenet sat, uncomfortably aware of Lady Tiya by his side. He didn’t dare look at her. It was obvious to him and every other man in the room that the dancer on the small stage felt she was performing for him, seducing him, the high ranking visitor.
The dancer was exactly the kind of woman he’d enjoyed back in Thebes, uninhibited, well formed, sensual. The Red Heron’s innkeeper had found the right entertainment for him.
Or rather, for the man I was before meeting Tiya.
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🙂 Your six made me smile, especially the end. I love his uncomfortableness with something that used to feel so comfortable, all before he’d met Tiya.
Thank you! I’m glad that came through….he’s a good guy, just never been in love before so now he’s a bit confused.
Great last line! I hope they can avoid dying!
Thank you! These two characters do make quite a journey before they get to the HEA!
Um, awkward. Wish Tiya could read his mind.
Well, they do have to discuss it later, for sure! Ms. sexy dancer gets even more aggressive but I ran out of sentences for today!
Yay! Stay true to Tiya!
He does, he will, he must!
Oooh – I like this one! Great job!
Love his loyalty to Tiya. 🙂
Love the way you showed how uncomfortable he is.
Very well done – i really liked the insight this six gave xx
Kerrianne, Taryn, Ranae, Carrie Ann – thanks for the comments, glad the feelings came through. Meeting Tiya does throw Khenet into a whole other state of mind that takes getting used to for a warrior! And the dancer doesn’t help!
Love it! I can sense his emotion and self-control next to Tiya. 🙂
Thanks, that’s what I was trying for…
I love Egyptian stories! This sounds like a fantastic one 🙂
Great six! Love how a good woman really changes a man. You illustrated that beautifully in this snippet!
Wow, nice excerpt there! 😀
Melynda & Amy, thank you so much, glad you enjoyed the snippet and I really appreciate the encouragement!
Last line did me in! 🙂
Thank you! I’m really pleased to hear the scene worked to that point, when you read it!
Nice intrigue.
Great six!
Lydia, Alix & Nellie, thanks for the feedback, so glad to hear you enjoyed the little snippet!
love that last line, the shift in his emotions. I love that moment. Great six.
Much appreciated, so glad you enjoyed it!!!
Great six. Nice peek inside Khenet’s mind.
Thanks for the compliment! I enjoyed writing this scene a LOT. Tiya’s reaction is good too (if I do say so myself) but ran out of sentences!
Nice visual and could feel the tension. I shall return 😀
Thank you! I’m really hoping this gets picked up as it’s out on submission now…you are very encouraging!
Oh, love this premise! Ancient Egypt always intrigues me. Great insight into the effect she’s having on him. Looking forward to more!
I always loved Ancient Egypt too, having fun with my paranormal version of 1500 BC, so glad you enjoyed the snippet! Thank you!
I loved your six last week and this week is no exception. I’ve only grown to be even more engrossed. I can’t wait for next week!
Thank you! I’m happy to hear you’re tuning in every week on this! Very flattering!
Awesome six, Veronica, and I LOVE the name Khenet! Can’t wait to see what you give us next week! Happy Sunday!
I’m so glad you like my hero’s name, thank you! I really appreciate the encouragement, will try to find another good snippet for next week!
Ah, his love has changed him. Nice character development! And the setting and premise are incredible hooks for me. Thanks for the peek!
Thank *you*, so glad you enjoyed the excerpt! I really had fun with this novel and these characters.
Ooh, I really enjoyed this! Hmmm…I cannot wait to read next week’s six! Your characters are very appealing! Have a great night! 🙂
Music to an author’s ears! Thank you! I’ll try to find another interesting six sentences for next week, for sure.
Niiiice. Isn’t that what every woman likes to hear (even though he didn’t say it directly to her)? Great six.
Thank you very much! Khenet and Tiya definitely do have to have a conversation – she wasn’t happy about the dancers. But that would be another six sentences or more!
Love these insights in the the hero’s feelings – especially when he is discovering new feelings for the heroine. Great six, Veronica!
No wonder he’s uncomfortable, she’s probably gauging his reaction to the dancer, hehe. Nice six!
Oh indeed she WAS!
I hope he doesn’t give in to the temptation!
souns like there will be sparks soon
What a cool plot and setting!
Lisa, Jayel & Ruth, thanks so much for the comments! Glad you enjoyed the snippet and really appreciated your reactions! A Happy Author, Veronica
I really liked how you showed his transition, from the man he was to his realizations that things have changed (possibly for the better 😉 ) – because of Tiya. Very nice six. 😀
Thank you very much! I’m happy you enjoyed the snippet!
I love ancient Egypt. Can’t wait to see the whole story someday!
Me too! It’s out on submission so I’m keeping my fingers crossed! At least Priestess of the Nile will be out in January from Carina. Thank you!!!!
This is cute 🙂
Great six – I’m looking forward to more!
Fantastic six!
Misa, E. Jamie & Lucy, thanks so much for the comments! I love comments, very encouraging!