Here’s one more excerpt from my new book Wreck of the Nebula Dream, science fiction with romantic elements, available from Amazon and Barnes & Noble. Continuing with introducing some of the other characters my hero Nick will have to risk his life to save.
The situation: Nick Jameson, Sectors Special Forces, has unexpectedly wound up traveling to his next assignment via a new luxury liner. The ship has problems early in the voyage but then suffers a catastrophe of Titanic proportions.
Prior to all of that, on the shuttle up to the Nebula Dream, Nick casually notices a small family group, not realizing how important the two children are going to become to him when disaster strikes:
The young boy, probably eight or ten, had bumped into Nick once, playing some game in the shuttle’s open aisle. He’d apologized politely. His younger sister stayed in her mother’s lap, sucking on her thumb and clutching a large, old fashioned stuffed animal of some kind. Her big, soft brown eyes, fringed with extravagant lashes, kept closing sleepily. Then some sound would reawaken her with a jerk.
Bothered by his own painful memories, Nick averted his gaze from the cozy family group, sampling the drink again, crunching an ice cube.
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Oh the suspense…I was thinking why is she sharing this cozy little family? This doesn’t sound like Veronica…. Oh…Nick’s got a tragic past…my fav!
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Loved your comment – thanks! I’m glad the snippet worked for you 🙂
Poor Nick. Nicely subtle insight into his character.
Thanks! Trying to do the foreshadowing 🙂
lovely description, l can sense his inner sadness.
Oh, what a heart-wrencher! And the description of what’s going on and of the children is excellent. Even if I wasn’t already in love with the hero, I would be right now. Great six!
Oh nice little insight into his character here, and great description of the family tableau!
He has no idea and I can feel that, but he is intrigued, cool moment! love the ice!! great 6!!
Nice moment of peace and foreshadowing before the catastrophe. 🙂
Very nice! I like how the cozy family moment gives him pain. And the ice cubes. 🙂
I like this guy.
I’m pretty fond of Nick myself 🙂 Thank you!
Captivating and well written six:-)
Excellent six–foreshadowing, introducing the hero’s painful past, the sound of that ice. . .
Great foreshadowing, having a quiet shuttle ride juxtaposed against a subtle, inexplicable fear in a small child and the hero’s painful memories.
Interesting. The comparison to Titanic has me hooked. I’m envisioning a disaster.
Loved the show of emotion in your six, Veronica. Well done!
Okay, I really really need to read this hon!!!
Unsettling suspense. It gave me a chill like watching everyone happy in one of those horror flicks, and then, WHAM! Change in direction. Good six!
I really appreciate the comments, glad this little scene works for people, establishes a mood…!
So painful to be on the outside of happy family, looking in and dealing with unpleasant memories.
Aw, he’s breaking my heart. Well done!
They sound like some cute kids. Too bad the sight of them triggers bad memories for the hero. 🙁
Nice 6! I like the hero and love the description of the little girl. I wanted to scoop her up and hug her. So curious as to what happens to them!
Oh, I LOVE “extravagant lashes” – that’s a fantastic piece of description in a very strong six.
Great writing!