Going back to my SFR , out on submission now, set in the same universe as my recently published WRECK of the NEBULA DREAM. Andrianda (Andi) Markriss, a planetary representative for Loxton Galactic Trading, has been spending a lazy summer with her best friend in the highly exclusive summer compound of the planet Zulaire’s ruling nobility, networking. On a day when a number of strange and disturbing things have already happened, Captain Tom Deverane, Sectors Special Forces, unexpectedly shows up with a troop of soldiers and demands she leave with him. Immediately.
Andi doesn’t take this very well….in fact, she refuses to go. Later in the evening, all hell has broken loose, as the captain predicted.
Trying to avoid spoilers here, after certain “events”, she and the soldiers are on the run. In today’s scene, they’re camped for the night beside a lake. Deverane has the middle of the night watch and since Andi can’t sleep, they’ve been having a peaceful conversation.
In honor of Memorial Day, I picked this snippet because Deverane explains some of why he joined the military.
“There are a lot of vivid, horrible images from the village forming a queue in my subconscious tonight but those kinds of things don’t affect soldiers, I suppose.” Leaning back, she tilted her head to look at him, eyebrows slightly raised in query.
He continued to gaze across the rippling water and said nothing for a long minute. When he did speak, his voice was low and measured. “I went into the military because the abuse and slaughter of innocent civilians does bother me and at least in the service, I can make a difference, can do something to prevent the enemy from committing atrocities. Or pay them back.”
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This is nice. I like her lead in, coaxing him to reveal a bit. Well written.
Great six! I love Deverane’s response.
Can’t wait for this one. 🙂 Sounds like it’s going great!
You capture the peaceful moment so beautifully. I really like that captain, Deverane.
Very touching. Shows his sense of honor and why he’s the hero. Great six! Is that a pic of a nebula? Gorgeous!
Love Deverane’s answer to this. It’s heart touching. Makes him such a likeable hero.
This. Yes. Exactly! I love Deverane. I can’t wait to get to know him better.
That’s a great six! What a noble hero!
I loved his dialogue to her. It was honest and revealing. This seems like a pivotal moment between them!
Great six, and it shows his humanity and compassion.
He sounds like a nice hero. 🙂
Love the conviction of his character. Totally swoon-worthy hero material!
Now that’s a hero. Doesn’t even matter what he looks like. He’s a keeper. Well done. Great six!
What a hero! I’d have gone with him. . .
Good for him! The real heroes of the day.
Great moment between them. Nice six!
I love her line about the images forming a queue, and his response is spot on. It is a wonderful moment between them. Love it.
Great choice for this holiday weekend. Best of luck with the submission!
This is a great scene here. I gives us a deeper glimpse into his character and what motivates him. Well done 🙂
Would that all soldiers felt that way.
Love his response. A true hero!
I love Deverane’s sentiments. Wonderful six.
Nice bonding moment between them. Great six.
Wonderful reveal of his character. Great work.
Great snippet. By the way, I LOVE your cover for Priestess of the Nile. Gorgeous.
Thanks, the cover was by Frauke at Croco Designs – they do such wonderful covers!
“…make a difference. Or say them back.” …Lots of emotion in those lines. Great six, Veronica!
oops… that was supposed to be “pay” them back. 😉
Wonderful snippet. I love the insight into Deverane.
I can feel the quiet in this – great job of bringing that out. And I LOVE his parting thought!