Going back to my SFR , out on submission now, set in the same universe as my recently published WRECK of the NEBULA DREAM. Andrianda (Andi) Markriss, a planetary representative for Loxton Galactic Trading, has been spending a lazy summer with her best friend in the highly exclusive summer compound of the planet Zulaire’s ruling nobility, networking. On a day when a number of strange and disturbing things have already happened, Captain Tom Deverane, Sectors Special Forces, unexpectedly shows up with a troop of soldiers and demands she leave with him. Immediately.
Andi doesn’t take this very well….in fact, she refuses to go. Later in the evening, all hell has broken loose, as the captain predicted.
Trying to avoid spoilers here, after certain “events”, she and the soldiers are on the run. Just now the scouts have reported a party of civilians in trouble ahead. Andi impulsively urges Deverane to rescue them. Here’s his answer:
“I thought I told you—more than once—my primary orders don’t allow me the discretion to go around the countryside rescuing everyone in distress.” Spacing out each word for emphasis, he said, “I have to get back to the capital. We’ve got vital information that could stop the entire planet from descending into war so I can’t conduct fire fights and rescue individuals. You were an exception because someone somewhere pulled a lot of rank to get special orders issued,okay?”
Biting her lip, Andi flushed and jerked her elbow away from him. I wish he wouldn’t keep rubbing it in my face that I got special treatment – I didn’t ask for him to come rescue me.
(What do you think, after a few weeks of reading this in snippets – will Deverane find a way to justify attempting a rescue?)
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Great six! It appears Deverane has his hands full.
Yes, Andi doesn’t make life easy for him at times LOL!
LOL….well, THAT was certainly not the answer she wanted. Not sure who’s more ticked off, her for being told that, again, or him for having to be frank and honest. If there’s any connection being established…he may have just lost it. Great six!
Had to laugh – love the way you expressed it!
Enjoyed your six today. Thanks for sharing.
TYVM for stopping by – I enjoy this whole Six Sentence Sunday process, comments much appreciated!
Oh, I absolutely think he’s her hero–and he no doubt WILL rescue more people in distress than just his “charge”. I love your hero!! Great six. =D
He’s angry now, but I think she’ll get him to do what she wants.
Why do I think she’s going to try to rescue them herself and he’ll end up saving her and them? Or maybe not, but I bet this issue comes up again. Great six!
He’s an anti-hero type but sounds sexy underneath all that tough exterior!! I like your six!
TYVM! *I* think he’s sexy but then, I’ve seen him in action in more than just six sentences here and there 🙂
Oh, yes, come on, Deverane, justify it baby, she’s biting her lip 😉 I’ve been loving the tension between these two. Great 6.
Just can’t stop laughing, loved your comment :-)…glad you’re enjoying the snippets!
I love this story and the snippets are such enticing glimpses into their personalities. I think Deverance is a bit more…roguish and a bigger hero than he gives himself credit for. Definitely look forward to stopping by here each week!
I have to vote with @Kate Warren, too. I think she’ll take it upon herself and he’ll have to divert to save them all and grouse the entire way, but yeah. That’s what feisty heroines are for, right? 😆
KE, Lisa, Kate & Silver, REALLY appreciate the comments…you guys certainly have tapped into the dynamic between Andi and Deverane – so glad you’re finding this trip enjoyable! Thanks!
Great dynamic between these two!
Hm, his emotions are running high! Can’t wait to read what happens next.
Great tension! I can hear his emphasis on INDIVIDUALS and his urgency. And I love the premise. There’s something so irresistible about stories that immediately descend into chaos!
I’m a huge sci fi fan and I can’t wait for next week’s six. Nice job with the tension between those two. Great six.
Lots of friction between these two. Neither of them is in a happy position, and that makes for a good read!
His reasoning is sound, but she’s not going to be satisfied with that. Nice six. (And I hope this doesn’t follow a lot of the comments I’ve made today into your spam filter.)
Nice scene! Looks like he’s got a big job ahead of him.
I do love good tension. These two have their work cut out to get their HEA, I think. 🙂
Also? SFR? I’m there.
Hmm, he sounds kinda arrogant! Guess it’s up to the heroine to straighten him out. 😉
Crackling with tension! Wonderful 6!
I think he’ll be quite glad he went out of his way to rescue her. I can already feel the tension sparking. Great six!
Awesome tension between these two. Great six!
I like it. He does sound super annoyed at her. I’ll have to go back and read some more of the snippets!
First, thank you so much for the lovely comment you left on my blog. 🙂
I really enjoyed this six. very telling and I learned a lot about Andi just in this short time.
There’s definitely a lot of tension between them! Great six!
Oooooh, I wonder who it is that wanted her rescued? Nice six!
What Sidney said. There’s more to this rescue than meets the eye. Now it remains to be seen whether Deverane follows his orders or jeopardises the mission to humour her. Interesting situation.
Oh, I’m in the camp that wants to know more about why she got a special rescue. Makes me wonder who wants her safe and why.
Thanks, everyone for the comments – glad the scene works and I managed to create tension! For everyone LOL! Oh yes indeed, there’s more to the rescue – both rescues…!
Ouch. He probably wishes he could help them too. Didn’t he say he wanted to help in one of your earlier posts, and that’s why he’s doing what he’s doing? Frustrating situation for them both. I wonder if she’ll let him keep his eye on the big picture.
Sorry the spam filter had a mind of its own on Sunday!!! Thanks for alerting me to the issue, folks!
Great tension building in his dilemma and the struggle with Andi! Excellent conflict between the urge to do what he thinks is morally right and his pragmatism. Also a really nice touch in having Andi uncomfortable with getting special treatment. Great six, Veronica!!