Going back to my SFR , STILL out on submission, set in the same universe as my recently published WRECK of the NEBULA DREAM. Andrianda (Andi) Markriss, a planetary representative for Loxton Galactic Trading, has been spending a lazy summer with her best friend in the highly exclusive summer compound of the planet Zulaire’s ruling nobility, networking. On a day when a number of strange and disturbing things have already happened, Captain Tom Deverane, Sectors Special Forces, unexpectedly shows up with a troop of soldiers and demands she leave with him. Immediately.
Andi doesn’t take this very well….in fact, she refuses to go. Later in the evening, all hell has broken loose, as the captain predicted.
Trying to avoid spoilers here, after certain “events”, she and the soldiers are on the run.
In the excerpt three weeks ago Tom was taken suddenly ill. Last week Tom and Andi discussed his illness. The conversation continues…:
Eyebrows drawn together in a small frown, he studied her face. “You look tired – tell me you aren’t sitting in the chair all night. I’ll have to reprimand Mitch for letting you pull the hard duty.”
“I’m fine,” Andi said. “In fact, you should probably try to get some more sleep.”
“I’ve slept enough.”
Promise I’ll pick up from here for next week’s six…
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I definitely sense frustration and anger in this snippet. Good job!
Great six. Looking forward to more.
Poor guy, he seems very frustrated.
It’s so sweet that he’s in a sickbed worrying about her.
Love this adventure!
I don’t think he’s very happy about still being stuck in a sickbed. Hope he starts to feel better soon.
Interesting snippet. I’m looking forward to more.
Sitting in that bed, being the type of man he is has got to be a pain. Nice to see her by his side!
Really like the way you bring out their personalities. I like these two!
He’s so protective.
His frustration somes through very well here 🙂 Great six!
She’s really good at deflecting his concern. But turning the tables might not work on this guy. Can’t wait for more!
Oh, goodie, Captain Tom’s getting his blood back. I can totally see him getting out of his sick bed in the next second. Great six!
I would say you’ve been reading ahead LOL, except that this is still in the submission zone!
Love that last line, I felt it and it shows so much
You know, six sentences just aren’t enough with this story! You always leave me wanting more. 🙂
Mwahahahahaha! Thank you for the kind words!
Makes me wonder what he’s doing other than sleep. Worry?
Sounds like someones a little testy.
Typical man: doesn’t want to rest! Maybe they should drug him.
Such a battle of strengths between these two. Maybe they should both go back to bed. LOL! 🙂
Funny you should say that….oh, but mustn’t get ahead of myself LOL!
Awesome! Sounds like someone has their cranky pants on.
I like the tension between them. Nothing better than a coupla stubborn characters under pressure. Good story ahead!
Interesting! I’m sensing some frustration here.
I agree, great tension between these two…
Oh! Great six! Love it.
His frustration is *so* very clear here. You did a fantastic job conveying it!