Continuing on with my unedited Shifter and Girl-With-A-Secret WIP, Caitlyn draws the visiting band of shifters from the North into an empty room, as they mustn’t be seen talking together. She demands once again to know if they’ve come about Kyle. The leader of the shifters is answering her:
“Yes, we’ve come to this place for the third time in as many years, with the same bitter result.”
“What did the Witch Queen tell you?” Caitlyn said.
The man threw his heavy riding gloves onto the table. “She knew the time of indenture was only to be five years, she agreed to that, yet now the date is long past she won’t release him, claiming no term was ever set. We can’t prove it and she only laughs. She won’t even let us see him.”
“Kyle told me the agreement would end only upon his death,” Caitlyn whispered.
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The Witch Queen sounds scary.
Caitlyn must really like Kile if she is risking talking to them for him.
I hope they’re able to find a way to release him and avoid the wrath of the queen.
Scary and the same thing happens today all over the world. Good 8.
Their despair is palpable. Captivating snippet.
Oh. Intriguing snippet. Bad queen!
or maybe good queen – “upon his death” I wonder why she wants to keep him. As usual m’dear excellent snippet (threw his gloves – brilliant)
Thank you very much (re the gloves) and I’m afraid she really is a bad queen LOL.
Dangerous situation, l’m enjoying their frustration!
You need to get this finished. I’m loving it so far from the snippets. 🙂
Well you all have certainly convinced me I should finish this and get it out there in complete form, just have to find the time – thanks!
Poor Kyle! Here’s hoping the evil Queen doesn’t win out.
Hi, Veronica – excellent snippet and I agree with the statement(s) above – you need to finish this cause I want to read the whole thing – great snippet. Can’t wait to see what Caitlyn does – I suspect it will get her into just a tad bit of trouble.
Methinks the Queen needs to be schooled—or perhaps indentured herself?
I’ll bet Caitlyn will help . . .
The Queen is evil, no doubt. I wonder how they’re going to help Kyle.
Sounds like Kyle’s in a bunch of trouble. He should have gotten his agreement in writing LOL! I hope the Shifters can cause some trouble for this evil Queen!
Kyle can be a little impulsive and it doesn’t always work well for him.
Off with her head! Okay, maybe that’s a little drastic. lol But I don’t care for the queen at all.
The queen doesn’t seem super nice. I hope Kyle gets away from her.
That’s a predicament, for sure! Great 8 🙂
Oh, such wonderful, heartfelt conflict in this. I love this. Fantastic emotion in here. If this was a book, I’d have bought it by now. So hurry up and finish it. 😉
I’m definitely committed to finishing it now, after all the support the wonderful Weekend Writing Warriors have given, that the story has merit. I wish I could write faster LOL.
Ominous ending comment. Very intriguing.
Never trust a witch queen!
I love that despite the brusque manner of the men she speaks with, Caitlyn remains calm and insistent on speaking. Tells a lot about her as a character.
Intriguing. Great 8.
Someone needs to kill that evil witch Queen, that’s what I’m thinking.
Hey, another Caitly(i)n!
Sounds like the Witch Queen is a tough negotiator, I bet even if they’d gotten in in writing, it wouldn’t have done any good… Makes me wonder if *her* death would do.
Awww, poor guy. Never trust a witch unless their name is Glenda. Wait no, she manipulated Dorothy to kill her enemy knowing the girl could get home at any time. Never trust ANY witch. Period.
Betrayal! Excellent job setting the mood.
Good snippet, Veronica. It sounds like he knows more than his brethren about the Queen’s nature. 🙂
Till death is a heck of a lot longer than 5 years! The lying witch, literally. I bet Caitlyn will have something to say about that. Can’t wait to see what they come up with to do about it.
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Oh, no…sounds like a challenge!
What a great picture to go with this post! Love the way this is developing. Looking forward to more!
Intriguing!
Oooh! I wonder why she would agree to them taking him in five years… a life-saving choice to be repaid by Kyle joining this band? I guess I’ll have to wait until next week/time to find out!
Indentured till death – that’s a pretty substantial commitment change *reminds me of a cable company*! Really like the “voice” of the shifter:)