This Sunday’s excerpt is from an SFR WIP set in the same universe as my recently published WRECK of the NEBULA DREAM. Andrianda (Andi) Markriss, a planetary representative for Loxton Galactic Trading, has been spending a lazy summer with her best friend in the highly exclusive summer compound of the planet Zulaire’s ruling nobility, networking. On a day when a number of strange and disturbing things have already happened, Captain Tom Deverane, Sectors Special Forces, unexpectedly shows up with a troop of soldiers and demands she leave with him. Immediately.
Andi doesn’t take this very well….in fact, she refuses to go. Later in the evening, all hell has broken loose, as the captain predicted.
She stared at the mansion, trying to figure out exactly where the fire was blazing. The nursery! Adrenalin coursed through her and she jumped to her feet, heedless of the danger. “The fire’s on the top floor where the nursery is. I have to get to the children.” Before Deverane had a chance to stop her, Andi was running, fear threatening to choke off her breath even as she raced uphill.
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Perfectly paced for the urgency. Great six!
Ooh, dramatic! Nice six.
Love the urgency! Hope she makes it!
Great sense of urgency. Totes agree with the other commenters!
Wonderful six 😀
Very tense! Great six!
What a moving six. I definitely felt the fear and heat. The last line had me cheering she’d make it in time. Good job!
Nice action scene!
As always, an explosive beginning. Looking forward to more.
Great action scene, you’ve paced this really well!
This is really (excuse the pun) heating up. Great action. On the hook to see what happens next.
You do a great job with building tension in your action. Great six and I’m cheering she makes it! With Capt. Tom on her heels, I’m sure! 😉
Sweet six. You can feel her fear fuelling her thoughts.
Fire in the nursery — yikes! She’s brave.
Crap, run! 🙂 But oh the tension is lovely, great 6
Love this! can’t wait to read it Veronica!
Great action, perfectly paced.
Great sense of urgency in this six! You can feel her panic to save the children. Well written 🙂
I REALLY appreciate the comments from everyone, glad the scene seems to be working….hoping to get this WIP into submission early next week…so the encouragement today is very supportive.
Children? What kind of networking has she been doing?
The Planetary High Lord has a BIG family! But no, LOL, none of the children is Andi’s 🙂 She just likes kids.
Intense six! I hope the children are okay!
Well done–I’d be right there with her. Fingers crossed for your submissions!
Oh, no! This scares me–I hope she gets there in time!
Great tension, Veronica!
Nice six! Best of luck with your submission. 🙂
Intense!
Great writing! Intense, hot and engaging.
Exciting Six!
Super intense and dramatic scene, Veronica, and why mysterious things are happening there is definitely intriguing.