Really sorry to know that official Six Sentence Sunday is ending in on January 27, 2013 but until then we can keep having FUN!
Going back to my SFR , STILL out on submission now, set in the same universe as my recently published WRECK of the NEBULA DREAM. Andrianda (Andi) Markriss, a planetary representative for Loxton Galactic Trading, has been spending a lazy summer with her best friend in the highly exclusive summer compound of the planet Zulaire’s ruling nobility, networking. On a day when a number of strange and disturbing things have already happened, Captain Tom Deverane, Sectors Special Forces, unexpectedly shows up with a troop of soldiers and demands she leave with him. Immediately.
Andi doesn’t take this very well….in fact, she refuses to go. Later in the evening, all hell has broken loose, as the captain predicted.
Trying to avoid spoilers here, after certain “events”, she and the soldiers are on the run. Here’s a snippet from after they either rescued someone at Andi’s insistence…or didn’t LOL and have moved on, still trying to escape pursuers.
In last week’s excerpt Tom was taken suddenly ill. There’s a LOT of plot between that moment and this excerpt:
“How long?” He frowned, apparently trying to remember the onset of the attack.
“Four days,” Andi said. “Sgt. Wilson told me you’ve had this for years, taking some black market medicine to keep it in check – how can you still be on active duty with a chronic condition like this?”
He took another swig of the juice, tipped the last drops onto his tongue then handed her the mug. “Command didn’t have to know since it never affected my ability to do the job before now.”
“That’s hard to believe, Tom, how could it not?”
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Great dialogue.
I like that he’s a tough guy with this big vulnerability.
Yeah, that’s what I’d like to know, too! Hope you share his answer to her last volley next week. I thought SSS was going on through Jan 13, 2013? Did I misread the note last week. Bummer if it’s only going to be a couple of more Sundays. :((
Great six! I just love these characters (especially Captain Tom)
I’ll go doublecheck the date on Six Sentence Sunday again – I’d LOVE for it to go on longer! OK, it’s a deal, I’ll make next week’s Six pick up where today’s left off. Thanks!
You were right, KE, so I’ve changed this post to reflect the January 2013 end date!!! Thanks…
Yes, great dialog. I can see the conversation and her worry…now I’m going to worry about him, lol 🙂
Well it’s a romance so there will be an HEA if that’s any comfort – thanks!
Nice snippet 🙂
I suspect he will forge on, despite his chronic condition.
Ah, the ticking clock. LOVE THIS!!
He’s a tough guy and I admire him for it! Great six.
As long as he can keep it under control with that black market medicine–but why is it black market? What are the side effects? And most important of all, is it still available at all in whatever’s happening?
He’s gotta be worried the condition will affect his job now. Nice job showing Andi’s concern and Tom’s reaction to the episode!
And the plot thickens nicely! Well done!
Excellent dialog, as usual! “until now. . .” What changed, I wonder?
Oooh…such a tough guy working throught the pain. Always an enjoyable stop, Veronica.
I really appreciate the comments, happy to see the dialog seems to be working for the Readers. Deverane will have to get well with all these people concerned about him LOL! TYVM for coming to visit and comment!!!
Oooh, you have me intrigued. Awesome, awesome six that sucked me immediately! Exactly what is up with him? Love a guy who won’t admit to a weakness.
I love the detail of tapping the drink for the last drops. This is an intriguing snippet!
I can hear the exasperation in that last line.
And yes, it is sad that SSS is ending. 🙁
Great attention to detail. Nice six!
Hmmm. Wonder what he has and how debilitating it is? Will he have to resign now that the cat’s out of the bag? Great snippet to generate these and other questions!
Great plot twist! And now I wonder if it will add some building mistrust of his abilities (either his mistrust or hers). 🙂
Wonderful dialogue. Great six!