Going back to my SFR , which is now an R&R, working on the comments with fingers crossed!
Set in the same universe as my recently published WRECK of the NEBULA DREAM. Andrianda (Andi) Markriss, a planetary representative for Loxton Galactic Trading, has been spending a lazy summer with her best friend in the highly exclusive summer compound of the planet Zulaire’s ruling nobility, networking. On a day when a number of strange and disturbing things have already happened, Captain Tom Deverane, Sectors Special Forces, unexpectedly shows up with a troop of soldiers and demands she leave with him. Immediately.
Andi doesn’t take this very well….in fact, she refuses to go. Later in the evening, all hell has broken loose, as the captain predicted.
Trying to avoid spoilers here, after certain “events”, she and the soldiers are on the run.
We’ve been through Tom’s near fatal illness, his recovery (but no spoilers about how that was accomplished)….(did teasers about their romantic encounter LOL)…
Now on to their next challenge in the desperate journey across Zulaire – the Chikeeri River.
The sound of the river was immense, deafening, as fifteen foot waves reared up in spots, crashing against boulders too massive for the river to tear loose. Then came another of those dizzying slides down a chute, the raft turning sideways despite Tom’s frantic efforts to steer.
“Rocks, captain—watch out,” the sergeant yelled.
His voice was the last thing she heard before Andi flew through the air. Gasping at the shock as she landed in the frigid river, she took an inadvertent, choking gulp of water. Going all the way under, Andi panicked, thrashing, unable to tell which way was up in the churning water.
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Good action. I felt like I was in the water with her and didn’t like it. LOL. Scary. I hate wild, unpredictable water and this is why I refuse to go rafting. Fast-paced snipped. Great job!!
I hate wild water too, this trip in the small boat on the giant river would terrify ME – thanks for the kind words!
Wow. Great description.
I can totally feel her panic! Great six!
Very descriptive. Makes me want to avoid water for a while. Well done, Veronica!
Very tense. Great description.
What’s Tom going to do to save here? Or is she going to have to save herself? I’m sure he’s panicking! Intriguing six! Can’t wait until next week!
Very dramatic six! Makes me glad the only white water rafting I ever did was in the Jordan River, which is more like a creek than a wild river.
Ack, this made me tense. Which means it’s well done, indeed. Please save her soon, I can’t take the stress.
And if it’s an emergency cross country trek (homemade raft?) she’s probably not wearing a life jacket. Sounds scary.
Right, no life jacket (despite the photo I found as illustration today)!
Lots of action and emotion. Great six!
Wow! Excellent description. Are you a river-rafting aficionado or did you have to do a lot of research for this scene (inquiring minds need to know, LOL!) Great six!!
Awesome six! Can’t wait to see what happens next!
Gotta love an action/adventure scene 🙂
I can feel the mounting panic in this six. Great imagery 🙂
That was frightening! Nice description and a super six!
Tense action. Andi’s reaction is very nicely described. Great six!
Oh noes! Tom must save her! Great job with the action and tension!
I love the word choice, really gave a great picture of what was happening.
Wow, what a fantastic six. Vivid, tense and nail-biting. You sucked me into the frentic pacing of this scene!
wow this is so vivid, I was in the water with her and scared out of my wits!! great writing 🙂
She’s in trouble now!
Loved the great description of the water. Very sensual six–I was surrounded by the senses in this scene. Great six!
Great description, and excellent action-packed six.
Wonderful sense of action and panic. Great six, Veronica!