From a new Science Fiction WIP I’ve got going, set in the same universe as several of my other novels. (There will be romance LOL!) The first speaker is a Sectors Special Forces Captain, just arrived on this planet, along with one sergeant:
“This place has the feel of a riot about to happen,” Mike said, studying the market stalls in their immediate vicinity. “I’ve been watching the pair of old women selling fruit – they aren’t even bargaining – and the fish monger is basically giving his catch away.”
The sergeant rubbed a hand over his jaw. “Thought the situation report listed this place as peaceful?”
Leaning against the wall, Mike crossed his arms. “Background intelligence can be pretty misleading on an off limits world like this one.”
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Very interesting, Veronica. Nice world building and tension. Can’t wait to see more.
I totally agree with Kylie. Great work.
Great opening. You can feel the tension and sense the dread.
Well done!
“an off-limits world”? – now that is intriguing.
Scene nicely set both physically and emotionally. Great job of sucking us in!
Very interesting. Any thing “off-limits” is intriguing.
Right about to happen! Great phrase!
Oooh, intriguing, not only in the setting but how perceptive he is!
An interesting set up. This opening really grabs your attention. Mike is certainly very attentive and perceptive. Great 6.
I’m eating up the tension, nice set-up. More please.
Like neither merchant wants to risk stirring anything up? Nice.
Like how the setting is such a part of the dialogue.
The calm before the storm. Like the way you show us what’s going to happen by using small details.
Great six! Very intriguing! Sounds like something big is about to happen!
Nice six! I love a story that opens with a feeling of normalcy and then all hell breaks loose.
Smells like a lot of people living with fear to me! Can’t wait to see what they’ll uncover. Great six.
Intriguing! I like where this is going.
I liked the first sentence–great scene setting!
You definitely have my attention. Intriguing start!
An “off-limits world” and simmering tensions under the surface…terrific opening, Veronica!
Backtracking to catch up on what I missed. I am going to love this one! LOVE the captain. *happy dance*