Only this week and next week to continue with excerpts from my SFR novel WRECK OF THE NEBULA DREAM, loosely based on the Titanic sinking in 1912. In deference to the WeWrWa peeps who’ve read my book and are still kindly commenting, I’m doing my #8Sunday sentences today from a deleted scene so you’ll have something NEW to read. (Since I always do a Happily Ever After ending, it’s not too much of a spoiler to say they do get rescued….eventually….is it?) This scene takes place on the Sectors battleship Andromeda, after Nick has given his formal report to the Admiral and has been released to seek medical attention. He goes to sickbay but refuses treatment until he’s seen Mara.
She lay sound asleep on the hospital bed, hair tousled on the pillow, silken strands drying after a recent shampooing. He felt three times as grimy and in need of a shower as he had before, standing here with her. She slept easily, her face calm, peaceful, which he was relieved to see. I’m going to have enough nightmares for both of us, at least I’ve been trained for dealing with the horrors we saw. She’s pretty tough though.
Standing beside the bed, he murmured her name, not wanting to wake her, but hoping she would know on some subconscious level that he’d come as promised, as soon as possible.
Stirring just a little at the sound of his quiet voice, Mara didn’t open her eyes.
Bending over, he kissed her cheek, acutely conscious that he was going to be interrupted any second by the impatient doctor.
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That’s lovely. What a sweet scene.
Touching and vulnerable on his part. I love scenes where one character is observing the other unawares. You can catch an interesting glimpse of their emotions and personality.
You described the scene so well l felt l was there, watching over them! Lovely.
Lovely scene. He’s such a great guy! And this was cut–why?
The book originally had two more chapters at the end (and a prolog!), including the time on the Admiral’s ship which today’s excerpt comes from, but it was too much, really slowed the pacing down…so I went with one shortened final chapter instead.
Poignant scene written so well. Thanks.
So tender. Love that he says her name. I can feel the emotion too.
It’s an out-take! Love it. And I loved this book!
Aww, what a touching scene. I’m sorry it’s an outtake, but I know not every scene can make the cut. Excellent work, as always! 🙂
Thanks for sharing a deleted scene, wish more writers would do that 🙂 I like how tender he is here; I don’t know if he’d let his guard down like that if she was awake, but the scene shows a wonderful side of him. Nicely done.
Love the tender emotions on display here. So sweet.
Sad, what needs to come out. *Sigh* This is such a poignant snippet.
Very sweet, emotional scene.
Beautiful writing makes the scene alive. So touching/tender. Very well done. – sorry this got cut.
Very nice scene.
I’m waiting for my paperback to arrive—though I might break down and buy the digital version if it takes much longer!
Wow, sorry to hear Amazon is being slow in sending you the paperback! But thank you for buying it and I hope you’ll enjoy 🙂
Lovely scene.
Your writing is so visual and emotions come across well also. Lovely scene
Very sweet moment. Very well written. Too bad it had to be deleted.
A lovely moment, and so well described..
If you haven’t read this book, you should. I enjoyed it so much.
Thank you! I hope providing a deleted scene worked for those who have already read the book, wanted to give *you* something fresh!
What a sweet scene. You’ll have to use it in the sequel, it’s too good to remain on the cutting room floor.
I agree with Sandra!
Thank you both so much! Well, the sequel is all Khevan and Twilka with maybe a bit of Nick and Mara so we’ll see…
I’m really looking forward to reading this. I’ve moved it up on my TBR list!
Such a sweet scene. I’m curious to know why it got cut. Replaced by an even better scene?
I had two more chapters at the end of the book, which was just too much, coming after the basic adventure was finished. Tried to make the story a bit more crisp for publication by combining the two chapters into a shorter single chapter. Maybe someday if I do a sequel that is more Nick and Mara. Hmm, they could always be in another disaster, like the Titanic stewardess Violet Jessup who actually was on 2 different ships that sank and one that was in a ship to ship collision!
I. loved this tender scene. Too bad only these few here will get to read and enjoy it
An awe moment. Really sweet. I look forward for more snippets!
Really nice. I want to know more about him.
A very tender moment. Nice!
Wow, SF is usually not my thing but I find myself really enjoying these snippets. A great story is a great story, huh?
Thank you very much!
Calm and sweet scene. It feels like a pause after I-wonder-which trials. Very nice!
Too bad it got deleted.
Nice 8.
I like how he murmurs her name. Too bad she didn’t open her eyes, she doesn’t know what she’s missing out on. Good 8!
That was so sweet and tender. Great 8! I also really liked your idea about publishing “deleted scenes” from a published work 🙂
Thank you! I published the entire deleted prolog, where the person behind the mysterious “face in the engine room” is explained. It’s here: http://veronicascott.wordpress.com/2012/04/23/was-the-nebula-dream-jinxed-deleted-scene/
A tender, peaceful scene. The calm before the storm that will inevitably come. Good snippet.
Aw, how sweet!Thanks for sharing it with us. 🙂
If that’s a deleted scene, I’m anxious to see what made the cuts! Well done!
I like a man who wants to deliver on his promises, even if he’s the only one who knows it’s been kept. Integrity is sexy 😉
Nice 8! 🙂
I love that he came like he said he would. Nicely done, Veronica. 🙂
Sweet scene. Love a man who keeps his promises!
Sigh…. that was a very romantic scene. Great snippet.
“nightmares for them both” Love that! Great snippet! I’m really enjoying this story! 😀
What a tender moment! Enjoyed. Thanks.
Very touching scene that really makes me like his character. Looking forward to the final installment!
Like everyone else, I felt that this was a very touching moment. I also like that we got in his head for such an intimate moment. Makes it very really and very relatable.
Ahhhh… I’ll say it again. This is a good book! They are such a good couple. Not syrupy sweet. More like snappy sweet. 🙂
Thank you for the kind words – I like that, “snappy sweet”!
Thanks everyone for stopping by and commenting! I really do appreciate the support…next week is going to be the last excerpt from this book…just for a sense of completion since Sunday the 14th will be the 101st anniversary of Titanic striking the iceberg.
Very sweet scene. Made me smile.
Veroncia, I love the scene – it speaks to what’s important to our hero and the calm gives the reader a chance to breath before the action picks up again. Well done!