Weekend Writing Warriors Is This A Trick?

better wewriwaStill counting down to the release date for “Warrior of the Nile”…. the snippet below comes after Khenet and Tiya have spent some time on deck, watching the scenery as they sail down the Nile…right before this starts, she asks him to call her Tiya, as her family and friends do, instead of being so formal. (A little creative editing and punctuation and it might have strayed over into 10 sentences):

Khenet wheeled, the artless invitation surprising him. A trick or test from Nephthys? Or is  this woman trying to get on my good side, seduce me in an attempt to avoid her fate? Unblinking, he stared at her for a long moment, frustration over this entire assignment making his words harsh. “We’re not family, we’re not friends, this isn’t a pleasure cruise down the Nile on any Pharaoh’s barge. My orders are to escort you to your death and to perish myself as a result. I’ll carry out my orders, Lady Tiya-ami-kitara, have no doubt. But honeyed words won’t sway me from my duty. So don’t waste your time. Or mine.”

Next week I’ll give you her answer….


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Oh and if I may SQUEE, ESCAPE FROM ZULAIRE, my new SFR, became available yesterday. Doing the big announcement tomorrow 🙂

And the blurb for WARRIOR OF THE NILE (which is available on Netgalley now for reviewers BTW):

Egypt, 1500 BCE

Lady Tiya is bound to the service of the goddess Nephthys, who plans to sacrifice Tiya’s body to protect Egypt from an ancient terror. She embarks to meet her grim fate alone but for the hardened warrior Khenet, who is fated to die at her side. Tiya’s dreams of love and family now seem impossible, and Khenet, who is the last of his line, knows his culture will die with him. Struggling with the high cost of Nephthys’s demands, both resolve to remain loyal.

Neither expects the passion that flowers when Tiya’s quiet courage and ethereal beauty meet Khenet’s firm strength and resolve. On a boat down the Nile, their two lonely souls find in each other a reason to live. But time is short and trust elusive.

Without the willing sacrifice of Tiya and Khenet, a great evil will return to Egypt. How could the gods demand their deaths when they’ve only just begun to live?

39 comments on “Weekend Writing Warriors Is This A Trick?

  1. A lot has been said in so few sentences. I’ll bet her answer won’t be what he wants to hear. I hope readers love this when it comes out next month. I’ve always been fascinated with Ancient Egypt.

  2. Aw dude, lighten up a bit. If both of you are going to die, at least be friends until it happens!

    This excerpt says so much about Khenet as a person. Great way to up the tension. Thanks for sharing this bit 🙂

  3. “My orders are to escort you to your death and to perish myself as a result. I’ll carry out my orders.” Wow.That’s devotion to the cause. Can’t wait to see what happens when he applies that kind of passion to her.

  4. I wouldn’t have expected anything less from this man… what a great character! But there is so much going on beneath the surface of this relationship and I can’t wait for next week! I’m excited for your publication date coming up in September – I see it’s already available on Kindle and I’m going to buy this one 🙂

  5. He’s an intense one, isn’t he? He’ll be a tough nut to crack, but I have faith in her! Great 8!

  6. I really appreciate all the comments…everyone has so much insight into Khenet, truly! I’ll be interested what you think of Tiya’s reply…thanks for stopping by to read today’s snippet 🙂

  7. I’m really enjoying this tale, Veronica. Nicely done. Also, congratulations on your newest release! 🙂

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