Is It Too Late? DANCER OF THE NILE Weekend Writing Warriors

better wewriwaContinuing on with my paranormal romance set in Ancient Egypt. Nima the dancer and Kamin, one of Pharaoh’s warriors, are traveling with the caravan for a few days as they seek to escape the pursuing enemy and get vital information to Pharaoh to stop an invasion. Nima is being exposed to various temptations involving her future as a dancer and Kamin realizes how much she means to him. But he’s got secrets he can’t share…

Today’s excerpt comes after the Minoan dance master Andrios provoked an argument between Kamin and Nima, after which she danced with the troupe, spending the night in their company, while Kamin kept a self-imposed watch over the area to be sure she was safe. There’s been some editing and odd punctuation to meet the eight sentence rule.

Far too early the next morning, Nima leaned on the stone wall surrounding the well, stifling a yawn and nibbled at a piece of journey bread, waiting for the caravan to push itself into motion. She’d deliberately spent the night away from Kamin again, testing her feelings for him, assessing the reality of what she was about to do. 

                Andrios and his dancers probably thought she was really considering Ptahnetamun’s offer and were excited, providing advice and encouragement. And I know Andrios is hoping my curiosity extends to his talents in lovemaking as well. But she knew she was just playing with the concept, living the nomad artist’s life by proxy for a night or two.

                The opportunity was opening up too late – even a few weeks ago, she’d have signed the contract and been gone without a backward glance. Why didn’t I ever at least talk to a caravan master about the possibilities? 

                Bracelets jangling, Thala nudged her in the ribs, “Here comes your man, looking for you.”


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The story:


Egypt, 1500 BCE


DancerOfTheNile_1600x2400Nima’s beauty and skill as a dancer leads an infatuated enemy to kidnap her after destroying an Egyptian border town. However, she’s not the only hostage in the enemy camp: Kamin, an Egyptian soldier on a secret mission for Pharaoh, has been taken as well. Working together to escape, the two of them embark on a desperate quest across the desert to carry word of the enemy’s invasion plans to Pharaoh’s people.


As they flee for their lives, these two strangers thrown together by misfortune have to trust in each other to survive.  Nima suspects Kamin is more than the simple soldier he seems, but she finds it hard to resist the effect he has on her heart.  Kamin has a duty to his Pharaoh to see his mission completed, but this clever and courageous dancer is claiming more of his loyalty and love by the moment. Kamin starts to worry, if it comes to a choice between saving Egypt or saving Nima’s life…what will he do?


Aided by the Egyptian god Horus and the Snake Goddess Renenutet, beset by the enemy’s black magic, can Nima and Kamin evade the enemy and reach the safety of the Nile in time to foil the planned attack?


Can there ever be a happy future together for the humble dancer and the brave Egyptian soldier who is so much more than he seems?


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34 comments on “Is It Too Late? DANCER OF THE NILE Weekend Writing Warriors

  1. I love how easy it is to picture your scenes, and you work in subtle tension that really livens up each excerpt. Anxious to see if he’s really looking for Nima or if there’s something else going on 🙂

  2. Thank you everyone for the comments and for stopping by on this last weekend of 2013! I appreciate the feedback, glad the story so far is working for people 🙂 . I really enjoyed writing about Nima and Kamin, I must say. I’m finishing up MAGIC OF THE NILE so we’ll switch to snippets from that soon…

  3. Maybe next week I should share what she tells Kamin….or at least start on that conversation (8 sentences isn’t a lot LOL). I really appreciate all the Weekend Warriors and the Six Sentence Sunday Facebookers and everyone else who drops by!

  4. What to do, What to do. Conflict in a character is always a good thing for the reader. I’m wondering what Kamin’s secret is? Like is he really the Pharaoh’s son.

    (Excuse I’m still catching up from holiday week!)

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