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PRIESTESS OF THE NILE was my first published work and MAGIC OF THE NILE is the sequel to PRIESTESS.
You can read the beginning of Chapter One of PRIESTESS here on my website.
Merys has been tending an abandoned temple of the Crocodile God Sobek and doesn’t realize she’d been talking to him (in his human form and calling himself “Bek”).
Sobek forms a habit of stopping by the beach in the evenings to chat with Merys. He grows ever more attracted to her, she falls in love with him (of course or there’d be no story)…but she still doesn’t know who he is. Isis intervenes with serious threats….but eventually Sobek can’t resist sneaking back to the beach to catch a glimpse of Merys… “just to hear her sing”.
Merys has been fishing with a net in the Nile shallows when she loses her protective amulet, which unbeknownst to her Sobek had bespelled to keep his crocodiles from attacking her. With it gone, she’s easy prey…seized by a crocodile…rescued by Sobek and…I’m skipping the part where he magically heals her injuries. This will be the final excerpt from Priestess. I’ll be switching over to the recently published sequel Magic of the Nile.
She put a trembling hand on his cheek, saying “Who are you, Bek?”
“Sobek,” He said, clearing his throat as he stroked her back with one hand, resting his lips next to her ear, he whispered, “I am Sobek.”
New adrenaline pumped through her, making her heart pound and sending a hot pulse along her nerves. “The Crocodile God?” I’ve been sitting and talking to the Great One all this time, treating him like a human man? I fell in love with him – how could I have been so blind? “The Crocodile God himself?”
“Yes,” He nodded, watching her closely, his green eyes steady on her face, his brows slightly raised, “I’m sorry I misled you.”
(The above excerpt has been edited somewhat from the published text to fit the Weekend Writing Warrior rules and give you a complete scene. )
As always, I love your comments and feedback. Although this is a published work, the input helps for the future novels…
The story:
Drawn to his abandoned temple on the banks of the Nile by an enchanting song, Sobek the Crocodile god is even more captivated by the sight of the singer herself. Appearing to her as a man, he learns she is Merys, a descendant of his last priestess. Though filled with lust, Sobek believes Merys deserves to be more than just his mistress. But the rules that govern the Egyptian pantheon forbid anything beyond a physical joining of a Great One and a human.
Merys is attracted to the handsome stranger, who arouses passions in her that no man ever has. But with no dowry and no hope of ever leaving her village, she dares not dream of the future—or love.
Sobek takes every opportunity to visit Merys, taxing his resolve to leave her pure. And when he saves her life, their mutual desire must be sated. But can a love between a human and an immortal survive the ultimate test of the gods?
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I hope that Sobek can make her understand why he mislead her, and I hope that their two forms can still be compatible. It sounds like they’ll both be in for a lot of heartbreak otherwise.
No worries, there ‘s a HEA ending! Sobek can become fully human….
Nice reveal, and great dialogue to convey the emotions and surprise. Nice stuff, Veronica!
You can HEAR her heart thud here . . . talk about being out of her league!
I as so tempted to keep excerpting this book but it’s time to move on. I’m really happy that the Weekend Warriors have been enjoying the story 🙂 Thank you for al the comments!
What a way to reveal himself to her 😀 I hope she can forgive him for misleading her though. Nice snippet overall. I like the idea of a crocodile god.
Hmmm. However she feels, she can’t be expecting him to love her in return. Great premise and world.
Hmm, a crocodile god, that’s sounds dangerous and sexy at the same time!! 🙂
What a shock to the system for her. I wonder what they’ll do now…I must read this one!!
What a cool idea. The crocodile god. Good thing he did appear as human.
You’ve got me again, Veronica. Your knowledge of Egyptian history combined with imagination is beyond wonderful.
You have to love a god who apologizes. Great snippet!
Well he IS in love after all…although he has something of a struggle with the emotions, being practically a force of nature LOL.
I agree with Charmaine. You have a clever imagination to combine the two so well. And what a way to leave us on a cliff hanger! Good for you. 🙂
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You are such a tease to leave us with this cliffhanger;). Great scene that leaves me curious to find out how she will respond. Well done.
Sounds like a great story, Veronica. Good snippet. 🙂
She doesn’t seem happy about his revelation. Hopefully, he’ll be able to fix things quick. Wonderful 8, Veronica!
Talk about shock factor 🙂 Nice job!
That’s the kind of surprise no one is really prepared for!
A god who feels sorry…cannot wait to see how this plays out. Excellent job Veronica!
I don’t care if he’s a crocodile god or a man. He’s sexy as hell…and I want a piece of that! 😀 Awesome job, Veronica!
Nice job.
I believe his identity would throw me too, but I’m betting she’ll forgive him for his little deception.
I have no input that will help you with future novels. I love this snippet and think you should keep on writing just the way you write. 😀 Great descriptions, by the way. I hope you’re having great success with this novel, Veronica. 🙂
Considering I love Egyptian mythology I’m not entirely sure if I’ve ever actually read a single novel set in Egypt. Obviously that’s something I’m going to have to change! This is a wonderful cliffhanger. 🙂
Thank you very much! I enjoy weaving the gods into the novels and having them involved in the events, although in later books they haven’t necessarily been the main character, as Sobek was here.
Another great snippet. Lucky for me I bought the book!
Thank you! I hope you’ll enjoy the book!
The Nile, a god and a HEA? On my wish list now! Loved the excerpt.
I like that he apologizes, but his facial expression sounds as if he’s a little confused too. As if he’s not quite sure why he’s sorry, or why she’d be upset.
Hot snippet…hope we get another excerpt before you switch stories!
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Thank you very much!
Another wonderful excerpt. Even in its tweaked form, it’s still exciting. I can picture her shocked face as realization sets in. Hope you post more from this!
I really appreciated all the comments today, thanks! It’s always hard for me to stop excerpting a book but we do have to move on to the newer sequel LOL. I have a tendency to keep providing the entire book in eight sentence snippets otherwise! There are a lot of twists and turns in the plot before the HEA…MAGIC OF THE NILE occurs about fifteen years later…
I hope Mery gives him a chance to explain himself! She’s probably embarrassed and self conscious about her feelings for him, but he seems approachable. And sexy. I’d let him talk. 🙂
Oh wow! Great twist with an excellent reveal.