A fun way to sample new books and find new writers! Here’s the link to the Weekend Writing Warriors central page, so you can visit all the participants sharing excerpts today…
(Last night was another ER trip, doing ok now, so just going to post something from WRECK, which was my first SFR….)
The luxury ship Nebula Dream has suffered a middle of the night catastrophe in space. My hero, Nick Jameson, has fought his way to the nearest lifeboat and found chaos. (SMT is the name of the shipping line.) Some creative editing and punctuation has occurred. I hope this is only eight sentences, kinda struggling with the medicines and a flu variation I picked up!
“Quiet down now,” he said, watching the people in the front row of the mob, getting eye contact, to personalize his commands, make them feel like responsible individuals, not a mindless, panicking herd.
The blaring sirens and recorded emergency warnings cut out, resumed briefly and then died away in a slowly fading gibberish. The lights in the corridor flickered, causing gasps here and there in the crowd.
“Are there any SMT officers or crew here?” Nick said.
Desperation, fear, and puzzlement on the faces in front of him, many sidelong glances, mute head shakes.
Silence.
“All right, then, I’m Captain Jameson, Sectors Special Forces and I’m taking charge of this LB portal. You can’t all get into this LB – no one’s going to make it off unless you keep your heads and we go about this calmly and quickly.”
The Story
Traveling unexpectedly aboard the luxury liner Nebula Dream on its maiden voyage across the galaxy, Sectors Special Forces Captain Nick Jameson is ready for ten relaxing days, and hoping to forget his last disastrous mission behind enemy lines. He figures he’ll gamble at the casino, take in the shows, maybe even have a shipboard fling with Mara Lyrae, the beautiful but reserved businesswoman he meets.
All his plans vaporize when the ship suffers a wreck of Titanic proportions. Captain and crew abandon ship, leaving the 8000 passengers stranded without enough lifeboats and drifting unarmed in enemy territory. Aided by Mara, Nick must find a way off the doomed ship for himself and several other innocent people before deadly enemy forces reach them or the ship’s malfunctioning engines finish ticking down to self destruction.
But can Nick conquer the demons from his past that tell him he’ll fail these innocent people just as he failed to save his Special Forces team? Will he outpace his own doubts to win this vital race against time?
I’m glad someone stepped in to take charge. I also hope you feel better soon.
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This sounds very exciting! Hope you’re feeling better.
Sounds like a rough situation, but he seems up to the task. Great snippet!
Feel better!
Take charge man taking charge. You’ve created another admirable hero. And he may top all the others. Please get well, dear friend. Thinking of you.
He sounds like a man in control! I’m going to check out the link you posted. I miss Six Sentence Sunday and I finally have time to do something like this again.
Oh yes, you should try out the Weekend Writing Warriors, we have a really good group and diverse types of writing to share. It would be great to have you back in the mix!
It’s a good job he’s there! Great imagery.
He seems to be a good guy to have around. I really hope your health improves. ER trips aren’t any fun. Wishing you well.
Great imagery. 😀 There’s definitely a sense of urgency here. Hope you feel better soon.
Great snippet, Veronica. Feel better and take it easy. Blessings.
Hoping you are feeling better quickly. Get lots of rest! And, this snippet makes me hope folks listen to Captain Jameson, he sounds like he’s got a good head on his shoulders
Thanks for the good wishes! I’ll TRY not to have any new health bulletins to share after this…..some normal every day life would be nice :-). Tired of the ER even with the wonderful people there! I was hoping it had been long enough since I excerpted WRECK that people wouldn’t mind seeing a bit of it. Taking things very easy and slow today but I’ll try to get around to all the Warriors and comment. HUGS!
Hope you feel better soon. 🙂
Enjoyed the 8. Loved the way he stepped in and took charge, it was needed. Now hopefully he’ll be able to get everyone to safety.
Great eight, I really enjoyed it. I love how there is so much intensity in what you write. I do have one suggestion: ““Are there any SMT officers or crew here?” Nick said.” Should be Nick asked, I think…. I look forward to reading more. 🙂
Another trip to the ER? Hope all is well now.
A very gripping snippet. Nick comes across as strong and competent- always a good thing in a hero.
Great 8. Love how he took charge.
He must have a strong presence and air of authority – it’s not easy to calm a panicking mob! This tense situation could explode again at any moment.
I like his voice, calm, steady–dependable. Great snippet. (Sending healing vibes your way).
I hope you feel better soon! Love the snippet and the story.
I can picture the chaos and the calm as he takes over.
Hope you’re doing better. No trip to ER is ever for a good reason.
I loved this book. Try it. You won’t be sorry.
Thanks for the kind words, Elaine! I’m so glad you enjoyed this book 🙂
Another for my TBR pile! 🙂
And stay out of the ER, Veronica, for all our sakes, okay? <3
I’ll sincerely try, I promise!!!
Wonderful imagery. I could seen the scene perfectly!
Good news: it’s been a whole two weeks since I went to the emergency room.
Bad news: I’m still in the hospital, though they’ve reached the point of taking about releasing me next week.
Wow, I’m sorry to hear you’ve had such an extended stay, SueAnn. I hope they see fit to let you out SOON. Sending hugs and good wishes!
Love a commanding and confident hero! Nice 8!
You know I love this book, Veronica!
I am so sorry to hear that you had another trip to the ER. I hope you’re on the road to well-ville. Sending hugs. 🙂
Thanks for the hugs, always love those! I’m doing better today, which is a relief. Thanks again for how much you love this book LOL!
He’s in charge for the moment… I wonder how long it will last? Scared people won’t usually let their rescue slip away–even if they doom everyone with their panic.
Feel better soon!
He has some heavy duty backup, as it happens; otherwise you’d definitely be right! Thanks for the good wishes!
The only SFR I’ve read are Sherrilyn Kenyon’s League series. I’ll definitely have to add this to my “to-read” list on Goodreads. 🙂
Huge, HUGE responsibility and a very frightening scene. Really admire his willingness to step up no matter how daunting. Great snippet.
Hope you are feeling much better very soon.
That first sentence and the reference to a “mindless, panicking herd.” had me laughing. Good thing he’s ready to step up and be in charge. I’d probably be part of the herd. *grin* Great snippet, Veronica!
Loved this story. So sorry to hear about the trip to the ER. ((hugs)) Hope you feel better soon!!!
I loved this snippet. I could hear the sirens and the bystanders gasping. My favorite line “Silence.” So effective…
Keep smiling,
Yawatta
Sorry to hear you’re still not feeling well.
It’s nice to see a commanding, take charge, confident hero.