We Must Make Haste Weekend Writing Warriors

WeWriWa buttonHere’s the link to the Weekend Writing Warriors central page, so you can visit all the participants sharing excerpts today…A fun way to sample new books and find new writers!

We’re onto a new story of mine, a WIP that still needs a lot of work. Mark, an ex-Special Forces soldier in the Sectors, has been hired by the Outlier Empress to rescue a kidnap victim who’s been taken to the border planet Freemarket, where anything goes and the authorities are usually hands off. Kind of like Las Vegas…he’s broken into the house of  Barent Kliin, the kidnapper, persuaded Alessandra to go with him and fled in a stolen car, pursued by the bad guys and the planetary police. They collided with a cargo hauler…Mark knocked the driver out and assisted Alessandra from their wrecked vehicle, after which the couple flee into the crowded marketplace but are now trapped…(Creative punctuation has occurred):

“The parking garage is probably locked down too.” He couldn’t believe he’d failed on this mission he cared more about than anything he’d ever done for the Sectors. Preoccupied, trying to think of other options for escape, he didn’t notice the small being approaching until it stopped in front of him.

Assessing the sentient’s pointed face and triangular, gray furred ears, the wide yellow flecked eyes, he wasn’t sure what he was dealing with. Nothing he’d encountered previously. Waving his blaster, Mark tried to shoo the being away for its own good.

 Not intimidated, the newcomer clutched his sleeve with four curved claws. “Come with me – I know what you need but you must make haste.”

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34 comments on “We Must Make Haste Weekend Writing Warriors

  1. ooo nice excerpt! An unknown, unexpected creature that could be helpful or harmful. Gotta make a snap decision but what’s the right thing to do? You always stop at cliff-hangers!

  2. I’d be freaked out if a creature like that appeared before me, seeing as I’ve had alien-phobia since seeing a creepy, terrifying Time Life commercial about aliens when I was eight years old.

    That’s a beautiful picture of outer space.

    • Thanks, Tina! The book is a long way from being ready to publish, but at least the first draft is done, which is something. Needs a lot of revisions….at least posting every week for WeWriWa is making me work on editing and fixing this sequence I’m excerpting!

  3. Thanks for all the comments, glad everyone is enjoying the story (sorry to make you tense, Michelle, I took that as a high compliment though 🙂 Yes, Mark and Sandy are really in a tough situation and out of options…some more developments to go in this scene, so a few more weeks of excerpts.

  4. I love the term “sentient”—much less insulting than “creature”. It says a lot about the culture, or even just the hero.

    Your mind is an amazing place, Veronica! 🙂

  5. I’m with what others have said: I like the mix of action, emotion and description. It’s well-balanced to pin our hopes of the sentient. Love it!

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