The Globe Shatters Weekend Writing Warriors

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Here’s the link to the Weekend Writing Warriors central page, so you can visit all the participants sharing excerpts today…A WeWriWa buttonfun way to sample new books and find new writers!

We’re onto a new story of mine, a WIP that still needs a lot of work. Mark, an ex-Special Forces soldier in the Sectors, has been hired by the Outlier Empress to rescue a kidnap victim who’s been taken to the border planet Freemarket, where anything goes and the authorities are usually hands off. Kind of like Las Vegas…he’s broken into the house of  Barent Kliin, the kidnapper, persuaded Alessandra to go with him and fled in a stolen car, pursued by the bad guys and the planetary police. They collided with a cargo hauler…Mark knocked the driver out and assisted Alessandra from their wrecked vehicle, after which the couple flee into the crowded marketplace but are now trapped…until a strange little being showed up, offering to help…having no choice, Mark and Sandy flee with the creature and fall into a tent. The owner of the tent is an extremely mysterious being, who prevented him from shooting at their pursuers. She’s offering them the opportunity to Travel…not in a groundcar or a  or a spaceship…two weeks ago she showed them the Globes of Amarkana. Now Mark has picked one.

Mark knelt, the gesture feeling somehow appropriate at this moment. He let the Globe roll from his fingertips onto the carpet. Rising, he positioned his heavy boot on top of the orb, and glanced at Lajollae. Features difficult to discern in the blinding aura now surrounding her, she nodded. Mark drew Sandy into his arms. Closing her eyes, leaning against him, she locked her hands behind his back, over his spine.  Angry shouting grew closer, Kliin calling the princess’s name.  Mark raised his foot and brought it down in one violent motion, shattering the Globe.

And next week Mark and Sandy will Travel.


29 comments on “The Globe Shatters Weekend Writing Warriors

  1. Great 8! Your build-up was excellent (a bit like the Heinz catsup Anticipation song, lol) Wonderful tension and curiosity definitely raised.

  2. Great how the snippet shifts from calmness to a dramatic ending with the smashing of the globe. This ending couldn’t have been better for this snippet, Veronica.

    • Oh I totally get it, Siobhan, and I knew when writing the scene that this would be the thing that would come to some readers’ minds 😉 I just felt the best way to break the globe and Travel would be to stomp on it. We’ll see what I decide when I do the editing. Thanks!

  3. Thanks for all the comments today! I feel really positive about this WIP thanks to The Weekend Writing Warriors…I’m thinking I’ll probably give an excerpt or two from right after they Travel, sort of to completely finish the train of immediate events, but then we’ll move on to a different story.

  4. I absolutely love the description of how Sandy grabs onto him. I’m very sold on this story, but wonder what it is that Lajollae and the Globe have in store for our heroes…

  5. Very cool details. It’s an interesting alien way to travel. Does that mean there’s a finite number of globes? Does that fact that Mark and Sandy got to use one make them special beyond what we already know? Engaging!

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