Picked Up By A Whirlwind Weekend Writing Warriors

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Here’s the link to the Weekend Writing Warriors central page, so you can visit all the participants sharing excerpts today…A WeWriWa buttonfun way to sample new books and find new writers!

We’re onto a new story of mine, a WIP that still needs a lot of work. Mark, an ex-Special Forces soldier in the Sectors, has been hired by the Outlier Empress to rescue a kidnap victim who’s been taken to the border planet Freemarket, where anything goes and the authorities are usually hands off. Kind of like Las Vegas…he’s broken into the house of  Barent Kliin, the kidnapper, persuaded Alessandra to go with him and fled in a stolen car, pursued by the bad guys and the planetary police. They collided with a cargo hauler…Mark knocked the driver out and assisted Alessandra from their wrecked vehicle, after which the couple flee into the crowded marketplace but are now trapped…until a strange little being showed up, offering to help…having no choice, Mark and Sandy flee with the creature and fall into a tent. The owner of the tent is an extremely mysterious being, who prevented him from shooting at their pursuers. She’s offering them the opportunity to Travel…not in a groundcar or a  or a spaceship…two weeks ago she showed them the Globes of Amarkana. Now Mark has picked one and shattered it.

Heat and a rush of spice scented air swirled around them. Mark felt as if he’d been picked up by a whirlwind. He was afraid to open his eyes, as the air filled with grit or sand, scraping across every inch of exposed flesh. Tightening his arms around Sandy, he buried his face in her soft, fragrant hair. From the sensations, he’d have said they were flying through the air, yet a solid footing remained under his boots.

Now that it was too late, worries flooded Mark’s mind. Had Lajolae been trying to save them, or had she sent them into the path of some worse fate?

 Too late for regrets.

Next week I’ll give you the end of the journey, or a snippet thereof, and then we’ll switch off to something else in two weeks.

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38 comments on “Picked Up By A Whirlwind Weekend Writing Warriors

  1. So scary to not know where they are going and to wonder if he chose wrong. Great visuals. Terrific 8

  2. This reminds me of that story about the man who jumped off the Empire State Building. He survived and afterwards, he said, “About halfway down, I realized it was a bad idea.”

    But I’m sure this will work out better for our heroes. Eventually! 😀

  3. Oh what’s waiting for them on the other side?? Strong excerpt! This is the sort of scene that makes readers creep to the edge of their seats as they read 🙂

  4. Oh I do hope she was on their side. Wonderful imagery here! Can’t wait to see where they end up.

  5. Terrifying. But what choice did they have? I love the way you’ve built tension here and left the reader wondering what is going to happen and where they’re going.

  6. Excellent description Veronica!I could smell it, hear it, see it, and feel it. And I like his second guessing–and then accepting that it’s too late for regrets. 🙂 Wonderful 8!

  7. Oh, that sounds like quite a plot! Your snippets are always fun to read 😀 Not too often does a writer engage the reader’s sense of smell. Definitely adds another dimension to this snippet. It’s cute how he’s already protective of her :3

    I don’t think that this line is needed since it’s mostly implied by the preceding lines, “From the sensations, he’d have said they were flying through the air, yet a solid footing remained under his boots.”

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