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Here’s the link to the Weekend Writing Warriors central page, so you can visit all the participants sharing excerpts today…a fun way to sample new books and find new authors! (Also welcome to the Sunday Snippet visitors!)
The WIP is an epic portal fantasy, which is undergoing a final edit and will be released after Star Cruise: Outbreak in the late April/early May 2016 time frame.
Sandy and Mark have been transported to an unknown world. This snippet is from quite a bit further in the novel, after they’ve left the mysterious mountain oasis, in the company of some new friends… Sandy, who picked up an odd stone key in the Oasis, was bitten by a snake named Sherabti, went into the green light with a woman unknown to her and now is sitting in a room she’s never seen before, with four women who seem to think Sandy is someone else…the Lady of the Star Wind…A new player, Haatrin, entered the chamber and scolded the Moon Sisters, after which an even more senior goddess, Nuet, arrived to scold them ALL.
“I think this is all a mistake.” The key hung heavy around Sandy’s neck, and she wished Mark stood at her side.
“The balance of the universe demands correction of true mistakes.” The elderly woman slammed the tip of her cane on the floor for emphasis.
“I said we should let her die,” Tresa spoke boldly, “All the problems would be solved.”
Thunder shook the room as the crone spun to glare at her, moving faster than Sandy would have dreamed possible. “We don’t yet know the outcome,” Nuet said as the rumbles died away. “Haste only gets you in more trouble, youngest moon.” She raised a cautionary hand as Tresa opened her mouth. “Silence on your part would be well considered at this moment.”
Nuet has a lot more to say in this scene, so I’ll spend a few more weeks on it. Then I’m thinking maybe I’ll give you a teaser from STAR CRUISE: OUTBREAK, which I haven’t shared here at all.
I love the ponderous finality of that last line. It’s the sort of formal statement that would fit just fine in an historical novel.
It sounds a lot like a judgement or sentence, Veronica.
Love the different voices you have created in this scene!
This doesn’t seem to be going well for anybody! I love how Nuet tries to take control of the situation.
I hope Nuet doesn’t agree with Tresa as to Sandy’s fate. I look forward to hearing more of what she has to say.
I like the hierarchy! Sandy’s probably lucky Nuet showed up. I like the photo — it’s like a giant eye in space.
A courtroom scene in outer space with little defense for our heroine. Houston, we’ve got trouble! Wonderful snippet, Ms. V. Spring is almost here.
I’m a sucker for great back-and-forth dialogue, so enjoyed this snippet considerably. Love the last few lines from the old woman.
Tresa sounds like she’s going to be trouble for Sandy. Love Nuet just from this snippet.
Man, this continues to get more and more tense!
I’m beginning to wonder how many senior goddesses there are, and how often they agree about anything!
Sounds like no one is really in control of the situation. Sandy might have more power than she realizes! Nice job of keeping us guessing.
Loved it. They’re all arguing and here’s Sandy, not a clue what the heck is happening. Totally got the mood of all of that in your snippet.
History Sleuth’s Mysteries
Another great scene! Plenty of tension, though I admire Sandy for not breaking her self-control even in the presence of such a powerful person.
~Marcia
Hasty decisions like killing someone certainly can’t be fixed easily. Still, I’m not sure she’ll enjoy whatever they do to her to bring ‘balance.’
Oy! I’d definitely heed that request for silence! And how do they bring ‘balance’? Great scene, Veronica!
Exactly…how do they get this “balance” they’re on about? So cavalier about whether she lives or dies. Great snippet! 🙂
It’s a good thing Nuet is taking control of the situation. Loving the world you’ve created.
Or “think before you speak.” 😀 Great snippet, Veronica.
I liked the thunder – suggesting Nuet produced it.
Yes, I think I’d be quiet. Nuet obviously has much power.
Silence on her part indeed! Kudos to Huet for standing up against Tresa! Hopefully Tresa will see the hint.
That last line – awesome – I almost said – yes ma’am – out loud.
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ooh – chills on that last line. She is not to be messed with.
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Yes, seriously Tresa don’t dig your hole more than you already did. Because technically that’s murder if they let her die.
Love that last line! I think Tresa would be wise not to press her luck — or Nuet’s patience — any further.
This is one tough lady! I bet she has a lot more to say. LOL She’ll brook no nonsense from any of the sisters. Wonderful character!
Poor Sandy, caught in the middle of all this! Fantastic snippet, of course. 🙂
Love the last line! And I’m so intrigued! Great snippet!
Very tense, nice descriptions, great snippet!
Nuet don’t play! 🙂 Really enjoying this story.
Those women made the mistake and to casually say “let her die”, yikes!
I’d feel much better about Nuet’s angry retort if it didn’t include not yet knowing the outcome as if the dying is still on the table.
Following this along. Great snippet.
They have her fired up now. I think I would be shutting up if I were them. Great snippet. 🙂
I love Nuet! Gotta love a crone with some spunk in her yet. If Tresa was wise, she’d clamp up now before she digs herself even further in a hole for the “let her die” comment.