A fun way to sample new books and find new writers! Here’s the link to the Weekend Writing Warriors central page, so you can visit all the participants sharing excerpts today…
(I’ve now set a new record of 9 days without a trip to the hospital or ER so I think I’m making good progress out of the woods. Thanks for all the support and encouragement, Warriors! It has definitely helped.)
The luxury ship Nebula Dream has suffered a middle of the night catastrophe in space. My hero, Nick Jameson, has fought his way to the nearest lifeboat and found chaos. Some creative editing and punctuation has occurred. As he’s just about finished loading the lifeboat, businesswoman Mara Lyrae arrives, much to his relief. But she refuses to get on the lifeboat, as there are children in need of rescuing…
After hearing about trapped children, Nick knew he’d stay on board as long as it took to free them. But first, she needs to be safe. “Tell me exactly where on the Second Level and I’ll go – you get in this LB.” Nick reached out to take her by the arm, intending to guide her through the portal.
“No,” She took a hasty step away from Nick, shaking her head vehemently, “I promised that little boy I’d come for them myself, as soon as I found their father, or someone -if you’re going to help me with this, then we have to hurry.”
“I swear to you I’ll go up there and do my best to get them out of whatever trouble they’re in, but I want to see you safely off this ship first,” Nick said. “Now please take your place in this lifeboat so I can seal it and send it – you may not have another chance at a seat on an LB later.”
“I gave them my word – I can’t leave them.”
And she doesn’t……
The Story
Traveling unexpectedly aboard the luxury liner Nebula Dream on its maiden voyage across the galaxy, Sectors Special Forces Captain Nick Jameson is ready for ten relaxing days, and hoping to forget his last disastrous mission behind enemy lines. He figures he’ll gamble at the casino, take in the shows, maybe even have a shipboard fling with Mara Lyrae, the beautiful but reserved businesswoman he meets.
All his plans vaporize when the ship suffers a wreck ofTitanicproportions. Captain and crew abandon ship, leaving the 8000 passengers stranded without enough lifeboats and drifting unarmed in enemy territory. Aided by Mara, Nick must find a way off the doomed ship for himself and several other innocent people before deadly enemy forces reach them or the ship’s malfunctioning engines finish ticking down to self destruction.
But can Nick conquer the demons from his past that tell him he’ll fail these innocent people just as he failed to save his Special Forces team? Will he outpace his own doubts to win this vital race against time?
Glad to hear you’re doing better- 9 days is good!
Nothing like a willful woman to complicate the hero’s job. 🙂 Nice snippet!
Yay on doing better!
Yay on an awesome, dramatic snippet!
So…Yay! =D
Love the drama in this snippet, exciting and emotive, well done!
And the story just gets better from here! I love that she continues to stick to her word throughout the story. Glad to hear you’ve stayed out of the hospital. Wishing you the very best, Veronica!
Lots of drama in this snippet and I’m glad she stays loyal to her crew. I’m happy that you are doing better.
So glad you have decided to give the ER doctors a break : ). Love this snippet. He should just grab her by the arm and set off full speed to the kiddos. She’s not getting on that boat…
Her commitment is admirable, though it makes a tense situation even more dramatic and uncertain.
Oh no, trapped children. This story is getting better and better! Great eight.
Yeah, he’s not the only hero on this ship! Hope he realizes that she’s just as determined as he is, quick.
Heroes need heroines and he’s got one. Powerful tense moments as the ship sinks.
Nine is fine. Go for a ten and more. Be well, dear friend.
Uh oh, did I miscount in my exuberance??? Sorry, promise not to do that again, must be respectful of people’s time commitment here. My apologies 🙂 But thanks for the kind words – HUG!
When you give your word – you have to stick to it. Although I think it’s going to cause some problems.
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Again, the position each character takes in this snippet reveal much of their characters, I like that! Hopefully Nick comes around to realizing two is better than one and he leaves off this ‘I gotta protect her’ nonsense. Sounds like she is easily as strong as he is in terms of passion, determination, and smarts.
I’m so glad you’re on the mend!
I love both your stubborn characters, here! She’s too worried to listen to him, and he’s too worried to figure out how to convince her not to worry. 😀
I have this, and you’re excerpting some of my favorite bits.
Thanks, SueAnn, I take that as a major compliment from you! 🙂 HUGS!
Spoken like a true heroine . . . or is she a stubborn fool?
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I’m so glad you’re feeling better, and I still loved this book.
She’s stubborn–a good trait in a heroine.
Glad to hear you are doing better. Keeping my fingers crossed for you.
I like her. She will not be treated like the helpless damsel. He might as well stop wasting time trying to talk her into leaving, and go rescue those kids.
You choose amazing snippets. I literally didn’t breathe reading this interaction. You create great dramatic tension in such a small space of time as well as providing good insight into the psychology of the characters.
Love the intensity of this snippet.
Glad you’re getting better. Liking how your female lead doesn’t compromise at all here. Writing deadlocks is never easy, but always makes for the best reading. Good eight.
So happy to hear you’re doing better! Loved this book:)
First, thank goodness you are feeling better – continued wishes for good health.
This is a wonderful snippet and shows so much about their personality. I like that she is not a wilting-flower and with a bit of coaxing, he comes to accept that. I hope they are successful in rescuing the children and themselves.
Oh I like how she is so noble and I bet he does too, although it is frustrating him right now! Great 8, I can feel the tension craning as the snippets progress 🙂
Tss Nick, don’t argue with her because you obviously can’t win and you’re just wasting time.
If I’m ever trapped on a ship I hope peeps like these two are on board too. Very nice snippet. *Beaming healthy vibes @ you*
Thanks first of all for the good wishes on my health, really feeling encouraged that I’ve turned some corner and am continuing to feel better and more “myself”. And I always appreciate the comments! I’m so glad everyone seems to be enjoying the snippets. I did love writing WRECK so much and it was my first self published SFR. Fun for me to revisit it on Weekend Writing Warriors! (And for everyone here who has already read the book, thank you and I’m so GLAD you liked it!)
Great news on the new record;).
Love her commitment. Strong snippet!
I love that she’s a strong female character–no damsel in distress. It’s so cute that he wants to protect her! Now stop talking and save those children 🙂 !
Keep smiling,
Yawatta