Here’s the link to the Weekend Writing Warriors central page, so you can visit all the participants sharing excerpts today…A fun way to sample new books and find new writers!
We’re onto a new story of mine, a WIP that still needs a lot of work. Mark, an ex-Special Forces soldier in the Sectors, has been hired by the Outlier Empress to rescue a kidnap victim who’s been taken to the border planet Freemarket, where anything goes and the authorities are usually hands off. Kind of like Las Vegas…he’s broken into the house of Barent Kliin, the kidnapper, persuaded Alessandra to go with him and fled in a stolen car, pursued by the bad guys and the planetary police. They collided with a cargo hauler…Mark knocked the driver out and assisted Alessandra from their wrecked vehicle, after which the couple flee into the crowded marketplace but are now trapped…until a strange little being showed up, offering to help…having no choice, Mark and Sandy flee with the creature and fall into a tent. Last week the owner of the tent greeted them as being “travelers”.
Mark couldn’t decide if they were in more danger from their pursuers outside or from this uncanny new player.
A second group of Kliin’s mercenaries and local police ran by, two men stopping to stare into the tent where Mark stood. Cursing under his breath, he shoved Sandy behind him and aimed his blaster at the nearest man.
“Do not.” The woman who’d greeted them was standing at his side, although he hadn’t seen her move. She’d wrapped one slender, seven fingered hand around the barrel of his M27 , pushing the weapon aside, despite his resistance. “They can’t see us, we’re outside their existence. For now.”
On a totally different note, Dear Author has reviewed Wreck of the Nebula Dream and given it a B! I mention that here because I’ve excerpted that novel for WeWriWa and also so many of you have been kind enough to read it as well….WHEE!!!!!
“Outside of their existence”? That’s awesome, can’t wait to learn more about that!
Ohhh, very cool! Outside their existence! Does this woman have the ability to establish dimensional portals? I can’t wait to find out more and dearly wish that the book was finished and ready to buy;).
I too, say, “outside of their existence.” Layers of intrigue in this story.
Cool beans, Veronica! LOL! Just a great excerpt. Anxious to know about this world, and how Mark and Sandy will get along here. You must have a lot of fun writing despite the usual challenges that pop up. I always get the sense that scenes just flow for you.
Ooookkaaay. 😀 Outside, huh? Congrats on the Dear Author review, Veronica! 🙂
Very well done! Loved the action and the tension.
The last paragraph intrigued me! Congrats on the Dear Author review, that’s a fantastic rating!
Now that is a cool and useful trick.
Wow. Very interesting.
Think of how fast one could type with seven fingers. But seriously, it’s a great segment and leaves me wanting more. And a big congratulations on your Dear Author review. That’s something to be proud of.
This whole snippet gave me goosebumps, Veronica!
Those seven fingers . . . awesome. 🙂
I have to say I did not see that coming, “outside of their existence.” Wow. What does that even mean? Can’t wait to find out! And Congratulations on your Dear Author review. That’s awesome news!
That “for now” sounds a little ominous, especially paired with how strong she is. She must have plans for them.
Wonderful world-building through action here. There are a lot of things implied beyond the easy-to-follow and tense action. Amazing!
Seven fingers and they’re in a different plane of existence? Awesome! Looking forward to more wonderful snippets, Veronica!
Love the seven fingers and not moving.
Cool! That explains a lot, but opens up a whole new slew of questions. Nicely done, Veronica!
That was certainly an attention grabber. Great excerpt.
Another great eight! The tension remains high and ends on a mysterious note! Love it!
Interesting! Hopefully they’re not out of the frying pan and into the fire. Although knowing you . . . . 🙂
really interesting story concept! I look forward to learning and reading more about it 🙂
I say 7-thumbs up on this excerpt! I love the concept of a different (parallel) plane, but oh so mysterious… And congrats on the well-deserved review.
2 words – add so much intrigue – “For now”. Great 8
Love that “Outside of their existence.” Great work and congrats on “Dear Author.” 🙂
Outside of their existence? Love it. Opens up so many more questions!! Great scene.
I love how smoothly you worked the seven fingers into the scene. If he did shoot, would that cause some kind of problems, like the perimeter in the Hunger Games arena?
Thanks for the comments and I’m glad the scene works so far for everyone. This new character does have her own motivations….I’m pondering my writing schedule and whether to move this one up in the queue to revise and have edited next etc., since your reaction on WeWriWa is so favorable. We’ll see! Yes, I was totally floored and thrilled to be reviewed by Dear Author and SO ecstatic that Jayne enjoyed the book overall. I’ll take that ‘B’ and totally cherish it! WHEE!!!
Holy cow. Mind blown, loved this snippet.
I’m really curious to find out just how they’re outside of the other people’s existence, and what exactly it means.