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Here’s the link to the Weekend Writing Warriors central page, so you can visit all the participants sharing excerpts today…a fun way to sample new books and find new authors! (Also welcome to the Sunday Snippet visitors!)
Switching back to science fiction romance today. Here’s an excerpt from Lady of the Star Wind, an epic portal fantasy, which is undergoing a final edit and will be released after Star Cruise: Outbreak sometime early next year.
Sandy and Mark have been transported to an unknown world after breaking the Globe of Amarkana (you may remember those excerpts earlier in the year?). They found themselves in an oasis-like area with no exit. This snippet is from quite a bit further in the novel, after Mark and Sandy have left the mysterious mountain oasis (which wasn’t a zoo after all), in the company of some new friends… Sandy is bitten by a snake:
The pain from the snakebite was intense, like she imagined being shot with a blaster might feel. Sandy heard herself screaming, understood Mark was trying to hold her, but gradually the world grayed in her vision. She felt more and more distant. The sensation was as if she stood off to the side, watching someone else slump to the floor, hitting her head on the base of a column. No anxiety, no medical urgency occurred to Sandy as she watched bright red blood pool around her own unmoving form. Someone needs to take care of the bleeding.
A compulsion pulled at her, drawing her away from where her body lay. She half turned to see a bright green light over the altar where she and Tia had placed food and drink. Curious, Sandy abandoned Mark and the spot where her body lay bleeding, and walked through the ancient temple. As she got closer to the intricately carved altar, she realized a woman stood in the center of the light, beckoning to her.
No cover, no blurb as yet…all in good time!
Uh-ph. that woman beckoning to her does not sound promising.
Those are a lot of intense visuals and sensations in such a short timespan!
Oh no, Veronica! this doesn’t sound good for Sandy!
Oh, man! *tries to peek ahead to next week* You can’t stop here!
It wasn’t a zoo but they still had animals, a vivarium maybe? Somehow I think that was a good time to be bitten by a snake, if that’s ever exists.
Wow, nice description–I can feel her pain.
Uh oh. Not good for her! Excellent sensory details in this scene.
Oh no! I hope she makes it. Great snippet! I look forward to reading the book.
Marvelous visions in this snippet. You drew this reader right into the story and that, in itself, was scary.
Almost Happy Holidays for all of us. What a year but you did just great!
Mark needs to call her back! Good luck with the release!
Oh, crap! Walking into a light, even green light, does not sound promising. Stay away, Sandy! Great emotionally packed snippet!
Spooky but definitely attention-grabbing! Emotional yet succinct, which you do so well. 🙂
~Marcia
I love this story, but you’ve left us (and Sandy) in a terrible place!
Can I yell at my laptop screen – No Sandy – don’t go there!!!
Tweeted.
Don’t go to the light, Sandy!! LOL Great snippet, Veronica. 🙂
Oops! Walking away from her body is not a good idea.
Wow, great description of her reaction. I’m with everyone else – do not leave without your body!
I’ve been on a simile kick with my writing students all of last week, so I was tickled to see such great use of it in your snippet! Fabulousness 😀
Love the description. It’s a little spooky, what’s happening to her, and her detachment makes it more so, while feeling realistic. And that mystery woman has me curious!
Wonderful description! I’ve always had a fear of snakes, and this excerpt certainly doesn’t help with that. lol. Hope she gets through this!
Great imagery. Walking toward the light doesn’t seem like a good thing to do. Now I have to wait to find out if it is or not. lol
Wow! Fabulous details, as ever, and I LOVE the cliffhanger!
What a place to stop! Nice snippet.
Shades of your wounded Egyptian soldier!
Oh my! So detailed and full of tension. And an out of body experience in the midst…does the woman meant to help or harm? Great snippet. 🙂
Gah! Don’t go! Excellent snippet and a killer cliffhanger. Loved it!
Has she never seen Poltergeist? DON’T GO TOWARD THE LIGHT! 😉
Something really interesting is unraveling here. Looking forward to reading more!
Great snippet!
Wow… that sounds thoroughly unpleasant. I’m liking the bit at the end… something phantasmagorical in the offing?