Here’s the link to the Weekend Writing Warriors central page, so you can visit all the participants sharing excerpts today…a fun way to sample new books and find new authors! (Also welcome to the Sunday Snippet visitors!)
The WIP is an epic portal fantasy, which is undergoing a final edit and will be released after Star Cruise: Outbreak in the April/May 2016 time frame.
Sandy and Mark have been transported to an unknown world. This snippet is from quite a bit further in the novel, after tey’ve left the mysterious mountain oasis, in the company of some new friends… Sandy was bitten by a snake named Sherabti, went into the green light with a woman unknown to her and now is sitting in a room she’s never seen before, with four women who seem to think Sandy is someone else…the Lady of the Star Wind…A new player, Haatrin, has entered the chamber and scolded the Moon Sisters.
Hands folded across her stomach, Haatrin maintained her calm, detached demeanor, in stark contrast to the excitability of the younger women. “All will be decided soon. Sherabti has gone to inform the Mother of these occurrences and She comes to this place to judge.”
The Moon Sisters grew pale, exchanging furtive glances, and the light in the room dimmed.
“We never meant to disturb Her,” Amrell said, biting her lip.
“Yet you took action in a place dedicated to me from ancient times.” The voice was like the crack of a whip. An elderly woman, clad in flowing garments of black, stood on the threshold, leaning heavily on an ebony cane, her withered hand clenched on the flared snake’s head carved at the top. “You feckless children summon me to attend to matters I left behind long ago.”
There’s still quite a bit left to happen in this scene, so a few more weeks on it. Then I’m thinking maybe I’ll give you a teaser from STAR CRUISE: OUTBREAK, which I haven’t shared here at all.
There’s wisdom streaming out of that lady at the end. I’m curious what more she has to say.
I’m a little confused. She first says they took action in her place, and yet they summon her for tasks she’d left behind. Either way, they’re definitely in trouble. Good snippet, Veronica. 🙂
Yes, the snippet format does make it a challenge sometimes. Sandy and Mark had taken refuge in an ancient, abandoned temple during a sandstorm and it was there that she got bitten. The Moon Sisters knew she was in this temple (which I did identify in the book as belonging to The Mother eons ago); one of Sandy’s companions made a small sacrifice to The Mother, to thank her for sheltering them from the storm. That’s why the Moon Sisters were drawn to Sandy in the first place. So the primordial goddess is referring to the fact Sandy was in her temple and the Moon Sisters snatched her from there…
I’m thinking someone’s in trouble! Or four someones…
Love the snippet. Poor Sandy must be starting to feel overwhelmed.
ah good! I like the older one better. At least she seems to know what she is talking about and doing a bit more than the rest of them.
I like the description her voice like a crack of a whip. Great snippet.
‘feckless’ – Love it, Veronica!
They are lucky to get away with just a tongue lashing I think!
Sounds like they’re about to get what-fer. 🙂 Love the way this story is spinning out!
Of course, I love the old woman with all the power and the snake cane. She’s probably my age. Love this story, Ms. V. Be well. Miss you.
Oh, what kind of punishment is in store for the sisters? And what will happen to Sandy? Great tease!! 🙂
The Moon Sisters got in trouble…serves them right.
You interweave different levels of authority and new mysteries!
I agree with the previous comments 😀
~Marcia
Oh, it’s ON now! I have a feeling the feckless shit is about to hit the fan. 😉
What a fabulous excerpt. I love your descriptions and want to know more about the mother.
scary line – She comes to this place to judge.
It’s about to get uncomfortable for some 🙂
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Now the Big Boss is on the scene. I wonder what this will mean for Sandy?
They just keep getting busted by their higher ups, don’t they? That’s what they get for playing fast and loose with the rules!
I love your description of the Mother. She sounds a formidable character. Good snippet.
Oh my! A bigger boss. Hope she doesn’t hold Sandy responsible for their actions. Grows more intense each week!
Oh boy, somebody’s in trouble!! Those feckless sisters indeed. And when I first saw the post title, I did a double take… “Who’s coming to judge us weekend writing warriors?” LOL. Always love your snippets.
Annoying ancient beings usually isn’t pleasant. Nice snippet. 🙂
The boss is in the house. 🙂 Excellent job painting the scene, Veronica. I am curious to know what’s coming. 🙂
Watch out, she’s a little miffed. lol Loved the imagery of the scene. Like always you draw me into your world.
Oooh – it’s going to get good next week – somebody’s a little irked.
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Ah, the lady in charge has arrived. She seems a little ticked off so no wonder the ladies are a bit apprehensive.
Oh boy… trouble has definitely arrived. Great snippet!
Uh, oh. I think everyone just got busted! Can’t wait to see what Mom says! Excellent anticipation!
I don’t think this woman is going to go easy on the others, I just hope she’ll take pity on Sandy.
Ooooo, someone’s in trouuuuuble. Make that four someones. I love the description of them paling and the room dimming, really makes you think this woman is not one to tick off or disturb. I love the snake head cane too, it adds to her almost foreboding sense. Great snippet!
Feckless– Love this word. Great snippet.