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May be edited a bit from published version.
Sharing excerpts from JAMOKAN: A BADARI WARRIORS SCIFI ROMANCE NOVEL.
The excerpt – I’ve skipped ahead a tiny bit. Rosemari is still gathering her wits after awakening in Jamokan’s tent and demanding to be allowed to go outside:
She shook her head, annoyed at herself for having a scatterbrained mind and thoughts skittering like demented butterflies right now. Stepping from the tent into the bright sunlight, she blinked and took in the majestic beauty of a mountain forest all around the campsite. The sky was a gorgeous blue and she heard birds singing. Relief was powerful force running through her .“There, by the fire, please. I want to enjoy the sunshine. Being free is so wonderful.”
As she moved slowly toward the blazing fire, leaning on his strong arm, Rosemari tried not to feel self-conscious as the many men moving about the area stared at her, pausing in whatever they were doing as she passed. Until suddenly the group was all busy again and pointedly not looking at her.
“I could tell you weren’t comfortable with all the attention,” Jamokan said. “The soldiers are happy you survived. It’s hard on everyone when we neutralize a lab and aren’t able to rescue anyone so the entire pack is invested in your well bring.”
Did he give them a command telepathically? The others had obviously responded abruptly to something. Rosemari felt adrift, not knowing anything about her rescuers. They seemed to know a lot about humans. “Are there others of my kind here?”
JAMOKAN: A BADARI WARRIORS SCIFI ROMANCE NOVEL (SECTORS NEW ALLIES SERIES BOOK 13)
The story: Badari Alpha Jamokan and his pack are growing discontented in the sanctuary valley, tired of coming in second place to the pushy new South Seas pack when it comes to assignments and everything else. On top of the discord within his pack, Jamokan is distracted by the search for the right woman to be a proper Alpha’s mate to partner with him in combat and in everyday life. Even the Badari goddess is warning him in visions that he and his pack are on the wrong path for a happy future. In desperation, he receives permission to take his entire pack north to the mountains for a two week hunting expedition, where he hopes to use the time and rugged surroundings to settle the soldiers down and restore order and discipline.
And figure out his own future.
When his men unexpectedly locate a hidden Khagrish lab, he goes to investigate and see if there are humans to be rescued. Little does he suspect he’ll be called upon to break one of the highest commandments of the Badari packs and bring a new disaster to those who look to him for leadership.
Before she became a Khagrish prisoner, Rosemari Parcher was a hydroponics technician on a gritty colony world, who unexpectedly won a planetwide contest. Tapped to receive her heart’s desire and move to a totally different life in the luxurious Inner Sectors, her life had become a happy dream. Kidnapped in space by enemy aliens and given to the Khagrish, she and other humans are the unwilling subjects of a bizarre medical experiment where a quick death seems to be her only hope. Rescued by Jamokan and his pack, she finds herself deeply attracted to the Alpha but the devious Khagrish aren’t through with Rosemari or the experiment.
I’m sure she’s thankful to be free, but still unsure what her rescuers want with her. Great snippet to show that!
I like the contrast of her current weakness and having to accept his strength.
Its hard to trust after being a prisoner. You show that well.
I really felt her relief at seeing the blue sky, and her nervousness about being surrounded by telepathic alien warriors. Great scene.
It’s good they’re all invested in her. I suspect she’ll need them.
“demented butterflies” — that may be my new favorite line.
‘thoughts skittering like demented butterflies’ – love that phrase
It would be extremely disturbing to think the others around you could talk to one another about you and you have no clue about it. Still, I’m sure she’s glad to have escaped the lab at all. Loved the snippet!
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Her being disconcerted is well shown and very believable.
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Her being disconcerted is well shown and very believable.
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I’m glad the soldiers are all on her side. I thought they were thinking something totally different.
And I think that’s fair because of course at this point she knows nothing about the Badari. Which is why I made sure to have Jamokan explain why the soldiers value her so highly. Nine other women had died before they could be rescued, which saddened and frustrated everyone in the pack. In the series the Badari are absolutely devoted to rescuing humans and take it as a commandment from their goddess to do so. But Rosemari diesn’t know any of that yet!
I bet she is relieved! Has she recognized him yet from her sketch? 🙂
I’m glad she’s escaped the lab. I can feel her unease of her rescuers but then it would be difficult to trust.